[WIP - Full] RJ123426 - Lily Knight Saga


Jan 9, 2018
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DLSite: http://www.dlsite.com/maniax/work/=/product_id/RJ123426.html

Decided to do another Tsukinomizu game, this time stepping back to a previous game of theirs, Lily Knight Saga. This game is ever so slightly larger than Naedoko(RJ165659), which means it's quite a lengthy and involved game. As with other Tsukinomizu games, there is heavy presence of tentacles/yuri/futanari throughout all the scenes. Compared to Naedoko, Lily Knight Saga has a bit more yuri and scenes involving dicks and less pregnancy scenes.

As I normally do, I don't post these WIP posts until I'm well a ways through actually translating the game itself. I'd guess to be around 75% done translating the game at the moment. Unlike Naedoko, I didn't start with a partial that anyone else made, so the items/skills/weapons/armors/system/etc are all done by me.


Help requested:

I'm looking for an idea for how to translate one term: 魔触 . In Naedoko, I translated it as Magical Touch, which is a rather literal and stilted translation. In game it refers to a specific race of tentacle monsters that have special properties (seek out women, use aphrodisiacs, sometimes impregnate, etc...), so you could sort of classify it as a race/tribe of monsters. I'm looking for a better term for it than Magical Touch. I don't want to use "demon" in the name since Demon type monsters/characters are already defined with other properties.

For help with those who can think of a clever term, 魔 is used in words like 魔法 (magic) and 魔王 (Demon/Devil King) and 族(Devil or Demon). 触 is part of 触手, which means tentacle. So basically something like a supernatural/magical tentacle. Only a term that doesn't sound as stupid as Magical Touch. Worst case scenario, I might just use an untranslated Mashoku.
 
Dec 11, 2016
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For help with those who can think of a clever term, 魔 is used in words like 魔法 (magic) and 魔王 (Demon/Devil King) and 族(Devil or Demon). 触 is part of 触手, which means tentacle. So basically something like a supernatural/magical tentacle. Only a term that doesn't sound as stupid as Magical Touch. Worst case scenario, I might just use an untranslated Mashoku.
IMHO leave it as romanized pronunciation. The only translations coming to mind just sound funny to me, the only thing that doesn't sound ridiculous in English to me would just be simply tentacle monster. But that is kinda lame sounding in its own way. So Id just leave it untranslated, at least it sounds a bit menacing that way.

Edit: Also thanks for the release. I'd not actually played this, and now I have an excuse to ^^
 
Dec 31, 2008
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Mashoku seems fine to me. There isn't really a way to make it sound natural in English and since it's referring to specific entities you can simply use it as a race name like we do with orc or goblin.
 

habisain

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The basic issue with translating 魔触 is that Japanese is a language where names can have inherent meaning from the Kanji used to write them. English does not have that, so there isn't going to be a direct translation that preserves nuance - especially the nuance about these tentacles having some kind of magical touch (which seems to be the case, I think). So transliterating to Mashoku (or even Masawa) and explaining what it means when it's first used is a fair enough translation.

The alternative is that just as 魔触 is a portmanteau of 魔法/魔族 and 触手, you can use a portmanteau of Magic/Demon and Tentacle. These aren't words that portmanteau together naturally though. I can come up with the following that don't sound completely terrible: Magitentacle, Magatentacle, Demonitentacle, Demontacle, or Demonicle - with Demonicle probably being my favourite sounding.
 
Sep 29, 2016
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Since it's not a real word either way, it might be fun to forgo the English equivalents that don't exist and put it in something like Latin, like "Malefica Flagelli" (black-magic tentacles) or "Venenata Adnexo" (bewitched feelers). Referring to them as the Malefica or something would also be interesting.

If not that, squishy squishy fun rods could work too.
 
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ilyanna

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May 18, 2018
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No input on the translation nuance discussion, just want to chime in that this game looks awesome, and I'm looking forward to the finished translation!
 
Feb 24, 2018
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Yes. This is amazing. I love the works from this circle. I'm even slowly making my way through Gemini Fort to try and learn japanese. So this is definitely good news.
 
Jan 9, 2018
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The main story is 100% translated, as are the skills, items and equipment. All H-scenes are finished except for 4. All that remains are a couple optional bath conversation scenes and a few post-game events. After that it will take a while to play through from start to finish for the final editing check.
 

censuur

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Eagerly anticipating the results, thanks for your efforts.

Any chance you can share what you have so far, or do you prefer to do testing yourself?
 
Apr 8, 2011
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Thanks once again for all your hard work, chronomium. Your dedication to quality is astounding.
 

Stiltzkinator

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I'm so excited to play this again, but in English. Thanks for keeping us updated Chronomium.
 

sgno

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Sep 29, 2018
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Is there anywhere I can pick up this partial? The other one only did the menus and combat options.
 
Feb 24, 2018
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Is there anywhere I can pick up this partial? The other one only did the menus and combat options.
This isn't a partial. It will only be released when it is complete.
 
May 26, 2018
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Thank you for translating this, can't wait for the release... that said I would love to know if the translator I'm thanking is still alive >_>
 
Dec 31, 2008
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Thank you for translating this, can't wait for the release... that said I would love to know if the translator I'm thanking is still alive >_>
He is. He posted elsewhere that he's been caught up in real life things. Still making progress, though not as quick as before.
 
Jan 9, 2018
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It's not really caught up with real life things - The last part of it just isn't that interesting (tutorials, panty descriptions, etc...) that it's hard to summon up the desire to do it. But I've slowly been doing a little bit of each day to finish it off.
 
Jan 9, 2018
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I'm now done with all of the translating. All that remains is the editing portion, which is still a rather huge task given how large the game is.